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     Yesayah Newbie Poster Username: Yesayah Post Number: 12 Registered: 03-2006 Rating: N/A |
Lynching Talent: Decapitate Dream 4.4.06 I know you know that I know every fiber of my worth I just wish I were on a planet where others saw my worth I can't lie and say that it does not matter because it does. I wish I lived in a world of my own 'Cause here, Few people really care about the being, the spirit called FANIA Progress or no progress, they don't see my spirit And so I continue on simply because I know my worth I share my thoughts with my paper and pen, my friends For my paper and pen will never judge me My paper and my pen are never envious of me On this freeway, drivers want power over me And since they can't decapitate me They leave me to the lions’ command Do you know how many powerful people I know? Many have the power to actually boost my night flight Just by making a single call to another power- I know these people... They laugh with me and dine with me They say I am "so, so beautiful" But deep inside, They don't really want me to prosper To them, Helping me prosper Is like decapitating their power ...Power Over Me.... (c) 2006_Fania Simon www.faniasimon.com  | ||
| Rondall Moderator Username: Rondall Post Number: 86 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
Philosophically sound. The opening line kind of through me off rhythm wise but I can see what you are looking at with your third eye. Have you ever thought about entwining more prose into your poetry or do you prefer the undefined structure? Rondall | ||
| Yesayah Newbie Poster Username: Yesayah Post Number: 13 Registered: 03-2006 Rating: N/A |
Thank you. "Have you ever thought about entwining more prose into your poetry or do you prefer the undefined structure?" Rondall Nah-I prefer my defined structure. In college I had a brilliant professor who once told me: Fania, every rule and regulation was made by another human being. You too can create your own rule. Since then, I became more confident to let my art control me.  | ||
| Rondall Moderator Username: Rondall Post Number: 87 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
So be it then...there is an incredible caché of talent that subscribes to free flow. And if Troy has no objections, I will even leave the free advertisement for the book. Thanks again Fania | ||
| Jackie "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Jackie Post Number: 163 Registered: 04-2005 Rating: N/A |
I like the concept. But this poem doesn't flow to me at all. It lacks clarity,creativity and detail. | ||
| Yesayah Newbie Poster Username: Yesayah Post Number: 16 Registered: 03-2006 Rating: N/A |
"It lacks clarity,creativity and detail." Thanks for the comment Jackie. You are so right. I told the spirit that I was lacking...the spirit said: Write the freaking poem-not a novel.  |
