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     Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3613 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: |
My kids are addicted to the Game Show network on cable. On one of the games (forgot which) in the bonus round two people on a team must give a clue to a third, and the third person must get a certain number correct in a brief time period. The kicker, however, is that each clue-giver can only say one word at a time, *and* the two must alternate. The other day while watching this I thought, as a joke, "What a great way to collaborate on a novel with someone!" Then the thought stayed in my head. Maybe not a word-by-word collabo, but what about a sentence-by-sentence collabo. And not between just two people, but potentially a whole bunch. And what better place to test out this parlor game than Thumper's Corner---where folks seem to be just sitting back and observing, or on vacation, or Twittering their free time away, or whatever? Soooooo... What say you, TCers? Wanna write a collaborative novel (well, maybe we can shoot for a short story first)? If so, who wants to throw out the first sentence? | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 814 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2129 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: |
Oh Lawd, Ferociouskitty started with a ringer - a real humdigger. Can we void the previous authors comment? I mean, given the history of TC's, this story could end up somewhere that no man should travel. But if we don't have veto power. On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 13973 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC... Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own... While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs, and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as... | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3614 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC... Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own... While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs, and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. | ||
| Libralind2 AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Libralind2 Post Number: 1236 Registered: 09-2004 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC... Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own... While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs, and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Dam", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone" and she pretended to trip falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth as he begins to choke... | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3619 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: |
What happened to our work in progress??? OK, we'll try again. (And my apologies to my co-authors. I couldn't help contributing some grammatical edits. Also, I wanted to leave the door open for Dan to not die, so I fiddled with LiLi's contribution--forgive me, Sis!  Um...I also added more than 1 sentence to try to get us rolling again...) *** On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature... | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 823 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature. In cyberspace, no one was who they appeared to be, so she had been "LilRedCorvette" to her boss's "LabiaLicker69" in the African American Literature Book Club forum for 3 months before either of them figured things out. | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2177 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
I didn't know if we had to stay in turn. I was also wondering about edits and the such. You've taken that job and you're doing a good job. I guess side notes can accompany our addition? Yvettep, in your addition who is "with him" ....who is "him"? ******* On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature. She didn't actually want to kill her husband but who would believe that her spirited exchanges with another postee was not a prelude to murder. Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 824 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: N/A |
Carey and I posted at the same time, but since he broke The Rules and added two sentences (instead of one), I think mine should prevail. ;p So there! LOLOLOL... | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3622 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. Her boss... With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature. In cyberspace, no one was who they appeared to be, so she had been "LilRedCorvette" to her boss's "LabiaLicker69" in the African American Literature Book Club forum for 3 months before either of them figured things out. She didn't actually want to kill her husband, but who would believe that her spirited exchanges with another postee was not a prelude to murder. Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3623 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
[OK, TCers. Both Carey and FK's contributions stand. Edit added for further clarity. Dan lives...for now. What say you next? Is Rosa calling 911? Her boss? Thumper?] | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 825 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: N/A |
But Teacherrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!! (just kidding) ;-) | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14009 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. Her boss... With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature. In cyberspace, no one was who they appeared to be, so she had been "LilRedCorvette" to her boss's "LabiaLicker69" in the African American Literature Book Club forum for 3 months before either of them figured things out. She didn't actually want to kill her husband, but who would believe that her spirited exchanges with another postee was not a prelude to murder. Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... Then she thought better of it, and replaced the receiver, opting instead for her cell phone, deciding that she'd text Drucilla, her co-worker and BFF, who'd given her a copy of the hit single "I Kissed A girl And I Liked It", before revealing to her that she was having an affair with their boss who'd confessed that lately he'd been fantasizing about a threesome... | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2178 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: |
****Carey is anquishing over how he is going to stop this from being a porno novel**** Teacherrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!! | ||
| Libralind2 AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Libralind2 Post Number: 1237 Registered: 09-2004 Rating: N/A |
I Like it !! Next..... LiLi | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2179 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
Do we stay in order, or what? Who's up? Did Kitty snitch on me for writing 2 sentences? What about the tricky use of run-on sentences or comma splice? :- ) Teacherrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!! | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3624 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
[No need to wait your turn. You gots summit to say, say it. You wanna lead us away from the road to erotica that FK began, then do so. I agree the run-ons is a way to cheat the rules, but we can always edit them away in our next drafts. NEXXXXXTT!] | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14010 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: |
Let the teacheeeeeeeer/editor note that my contribution does not contain "run-on" sentences but noun clauses which are not in violation of grammatical rules but are, instead, examples of writing "style". And the commas are not splices but are added for clarity. Considering how getting posters to participate in this project is like pulling teeth, y'all better take what ya can get instead of crying "foul".  | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 826 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: N/A |
On Day 3 of Rosa’s strike—no cooking, no housework, no sex—her husband Dan came home from work with a porn video, a 3-pack of Fruit of the Loom briefs, and a bucket of KFC. Although Rosa was surprised at her husband's new found gusto, she had a surprise of her own. While Dan was munching on a drum stick and staring at the TV screen, salivating over the nude female cavorting about in the video he had just inserted, Rosa confiscated the pack of briefs and gift-wrapped it, hoping her husband wore the same size as her boss. Her boss... With him, she now needed a plan B--that is if she wanted to keep her sanity and her J-O-B. "Damn", she thought to herself, "I can kill two birds with one stone." Then she pretended to trip--falling on Dan's lap, catching her fall with her hand, and in the process smashing his face with the chicken bone in his mouth. As he began to choke, Rosa's mind searched for the answer to how things got so far out of hand. Innocently enough, it had all started with her first post to an on-line discussion board for lovers of African American literature. In cyberspace, no one was who they appeared to be, so she had been "LilRedCorvette" to her boss's "LabiaLicker69" in the African American Literature Book Club forum for 3 months before either of them figured things out. She didn't actually want to kill her husband, but who would believe that her spirited exchanges with another postee was not a prelude to murder. Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... Then she thought better of it, and replaced the receiver, opting instead for her cell phone, deciding that she'd text Drucilla, her co-worker and BFF, who'd given her a copy of the hit single "I Kissed A girl And I Liked It", before revealing to her that she was having an affair with their boss who'd confessed that lately he'd been fantasizing about a threesome... Mindful of the many lies she'd have to tell in the years to come, Rosa's text to Dru simply read: Hey, girl! I've been thinking about the get-together. Why don't you come over here tonight and we can...talk about it... ;-) | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2180 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... Then she thought better of it, and replaced the receiver, opting instead for her cell phone, deciding that she'd text Drucilla, her co-worker and BFF, who'd given her a copy of the hit single "I Kissed A girl And I Liked It", before revealing to her that she was having an affair with their boss who'd confessed that lately he'd been fantasizing about a threesome... Mindful of the many lies she'd have to tell in the years to come, Rosa's text to Dru simply read: Hey, girl! I've been thinking about the get-together. Why don't you come over here tonight and we can...talk about it... ;-) In spite of Rosa's intermittent periods of shock; a state of overwhelming anxiety, she gathered herself long enough to realize she had lost focus and did not send the text, nor should she. | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14017 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
Trembling with fear and confusion, stoked by the remembrance of her trail of words, she reached for the phone.... Then she thought better of it, and replaced the receiver, opting instead for her cell phone, deciding that she'd text Drucilla, her co-worker and BFF, who'd given her a copy of the hit single "I Kissed A girl And I Liked It", before revealing to her that she was having an affair with their boss who'd confessed that lately he'd been fantasizing about a threesome... Mindful of the many lies she'd have to tell in the years to come, Rosa's text to Dru simply read: Hey, girl! I've been thinking about the get-together. Why don't you come over here tonight and we can...talk about it... ;-) In spite of Rosa's intermittent periods of shock; a state of overwhelming anxiety, she gathered herself long enough to realize she had lost focus and did not send the text, nor should she. When the little devil on her shoulder suddenly nudged her, Rosa immediately brushed off the little angel on her other shoulder who never made her life anything but dull and confusing, and she then proceeded to tweet Drucilla, telling her what she was doing as she lounged there alone in her bedroom, wearing nothing but a bra and a thong... | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2181 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
In spite of Rosa's intermittent periods of shock; a state of overwhelming anxiety, she gathered herself long enough to realize she had lost focus and did not send the text, nor should she. When the little devil on her shoulder suddenly nudged her, Rosa immediately brushed off the little angel on her other shoulder who never made her life anything but dull and confusing, and she then proceeded to tweet Drucilla, telling her she what she was doing as she lounged there alone in her bedroom, wearing nothing but a bra and a thong... Struggling to fight her intrinsic demons; riddled with shame and guilt, Rosa took off her bedroom attire that was intended for Dan, dressed and called Thumper. He.... | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3626 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
[LOLOLOL @ all of you!] | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14018 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
After reading Carey's last paragraph full of misused words and a misplaced semi-colon, this endeavor is coming across like one of those contests to see who can compose the worst sentences. Shucks, I thought we were supposed to be putting together something entertaining and provocative and cogent; not a morality play full of stilted prose.  Where's your contribution, Yvette? You can fill in for me. FK, take it awaaaaay. Breathe some life back into the sagging narrative. | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3627 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
In spite of Rosa's intermittent periods of shock, and being in a state of overwhelming anxiety, she gathered herself long enough to realize she had lost focus and did not send the text. Nor should she. But when the little devil on her shoulder suddenly nudged her, Rosa immediately brushed off the little angel on her other shoulder (who never made her life anything but dull and confusing) and proceeded to tweet Drucilla, telling her she what she was doing as she lounged there alone in her bedroom, wearing nothing but a bra and a thong. After tweeting, struggling to fight her intrinsic demons, riddled with shame and guilt (though simultaneously feeling a full-body warm glow), Rosa took off her bedroom attire that was intended for Dan (but ended up for Drucilla), dressed and called Thumper. He had never responded to her previous requests to remove her more revealing posts from the discussion board, and now she had a new request for him. | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3628 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
[Whew! That one was hard work! LOL This is starting to sound like R. Kelly's In the Closet saga! LOLOLOL] | ||
| Ferociouskitty Veteran Poster Username: Ferociouskitty Post Number: 830 Registered: 02-2008 Rating: N/A |
In spite of Rosa's intermittent periods of shock, and being in a state of overwhelming anxiety, she gathered herself long enough to realize she had lost focus and did not send the text. Nor should she. But when the little devil on her shoulder suddenly nudged her, Rosa immediately brushed off the little angel on her other shoulder (who never made her life anything but dull and confusing) and proceeded to tweet Drucilla, telling her she what she was doing as she lounged there alone in her bedroom, wearing nothing but a bra and a thong. After tweeting, struggling to fight her intrinsic demons, riddled with shame and guilt (though simultaneously feeling a full-body warm glow), Rosa took off her bedroom attire that was intended for Dan (but ended up for Drucilla), dressed and called Thumper. He had never responded to her previous requests to remove her more revealing posts from the discussion board, and now she had a new request for him. But first, she had to dispose of Dan's lifeless body. | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14023 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
After tweeting, struggling to fight her intrinsic demons, riddled with shame and guilt (though simultaneously feeling a full-body warm glow), Rosa took off her bedroom attire that was intended for Dan (but ended up for Drucilla), dressed and called Thumper. He had never responded to her previous requests to remove her more revealing posts from the discussion board, and now she had a new request for him. But first, she had to dispose of Dan's lifeless body. Free to indulge the erotic curiosity that others might mistakenly call "intrinsic demons", unscathed by the ongoing intangible emotions that some might described as "intermittently riddling her body", holding the phone up to her ear, and Drucilla against her body, Rosa returned Thumper's greeting, ready to solicit his medical advice about the seizure her husband had just suffered after... | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2192 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
But first, she had to dispose of Dan's lifeless body. Free to indulge the erotic curiosity that others might mistakenly call "intrinsic demons", unscathed by the ongoing intangible emotions that some might described as "intermittently riddling her body", holding the phone up to her ear, and Drucilla against her body, Rosa returned Thumper's greeting, ready to solicit his medical advice about the seizure her husband had just suffered after viewing his wife's 76 yr old naked body while choking on the chicken bone. Rosa had seen NBC's "To catch a predator" and knew any attempt to justify her raw comments on AALBC, would be an act of futility. | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2193 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
Okay, OKAY! *smirk* Teacherrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!! Can I have a rewrite? | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14027 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
Yeah, Editor, what started out with potential has lost all semblance of continuity. I think we should've made this a "girl thang", because the male contributor throws things out of sync. Where is the clever wit of chrishayden when we need it, and whatever happened to LiLi?? | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14028 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
You can stay, Carey, because FK and Yvette appreciate you. I am too much of sticker for certain things, so I'm outta here. The husband wasn't dead yet and the boss was still around so the chicks could've simply been exloring their sexuality before reuniting with their men. This twist was would've contributed to making the plot interesting. IMO. Buh Bye. | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2196 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
No NO NO. am done. you stick around, the story was getting interesting. Erase my comment about the older woman in the G-string. Am done, really. To be honest, am working on a few things - really, about me. Am a control freak and I am working on that. So, it's best I see yawl later, you black allegators. | ||
| Libralind2 AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Libralind2 Post Number: 1238 Registered: 09-2004 Rating: N/A |
Im lost LOL LiLi | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3633 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
[See, this is why everybody says do not try to work with a writer and his or her ego. And here I go tryna work with several. LOL I'll work on some edits and continuity...maybe a story arc...maybe a different way to organize thangs so LiLi and others won;t be lost...and I'll get back atchall. I will say this: I do not want Dan to die so we will be seeing him again. ;-)] | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2198 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
Bingo Yevettep. I knew each would have their own vision of where the story should/would go, and egos probably jump into play. I was trying get back to Kitty's central issue of "online" conversations. I thought the added issues sex, and Dan's condition could revolve around that. Someone mentioned Rosa's calling Thumper "He had never responded to her previous requests to remove her more revealing posts from the discussion board, and now she had a new request for him" Well, "we" know thumper has something to do with the medical profession but that story had not evolved. So again, I was trying to move back there (board conversations) ...Rosa's moniker, her fear of being exposed, Boss's moniker, their conversations, etc. I was trying to develope the characters with my "sagging" narration. I didn't want the story to move to fast. Now, that's hard to say or do, when we didn't know how short this story would be. I am sure others have a different opinion, and that's to be expected, and am cool with that. Hey, I was thinking there should be a thread that ran along with this one where idea's and chest thumping can be exchanged "before" the author submits their addition. Just a thought... | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14029 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
Well, actually these kinds of collaborations are about challenging one's creativity and imagination and the fun happens when a lot of different people are adding their input to advance a compelling story line full of surprising twists and turns. This ain't gonna happen if only 3 or 4 people participate, each one on a different page. And, anyway, I was under the impression that this was a project initiated to motivate all the MIA TC regulars to stop lurking and come back so that things would pick up. This didn't happen. Only the same ol faithful few got on aboard and things went downhill from there. I admit I am not a team player, especially when it comes to writing because as I said, I am a stickler for certain things. So, that's why I signed off. | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3634 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
Bingo Yevettep Um, Carey, you do realize yours was one of the egos I was talking about? LOL So, that's why I signed off. Well, wait to see what I do with it before you check out for good, OK? I had no problems with what you wrote. Don't listen to Carey--you know how sensitive he gets! Re: participation--I never thought new people would necessarily join in. I have heard we can be a kind of intimidating group to jump into. Plus, I guess Troy is backlogged approving new accounts. Maybe he'll let us know at least how many people are dropping in to read. As for Thumper, I feel kind of bad involving his name without his participation. But not too bad. ;-) | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2199 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: N/A |
Um Yvettep,I was talking about my ego. That's why I mentioned my vision. I couldn't get out of the way. That's also why I agreed with Cynique that it should be a girl's night out. | ||
| Yvettep AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Yvettep Post Number: 3636 Registered: 01-2005 Rating: N/A |
Aw, Carey, c'mon--live a little! What: you can't mix it up with us women-folk? ;-) | ||
| Carey AALBC .com Platinum Poster Username: Carey Post Number: 2203 Registered: 05-2004 Rating: |
A Grandfather Conversing With His Grandson: Grandson: Grandpa, momma told me you wrote a short story. Grandfather: Did she really? Grandson: Yeah, something about "LilRedCorvette", "LabiaLicker69", and porn videos. Grandfather: Your mother told you that? Grandson: ahhh, no, but why, but why would Rosa end up with Drucilla and press her against her body. Grandfather: ahhh, maybe they were friends or somthing. Grandson: oohhhhh, is that why they were simultaneously feeling a full-body warm glow Grandfather: Well, no, all friends don't feel like that. Grandson: So Grandpa, me and Freddy are friends, can we feel a full-body warm glow? Grandfather: NO! Where is all this coming from? Grandson: Just some ol'stupid book. Grandfather: You shouldn't be reading stupid books, how old are you now? Grandson: Am six Grandpa and I can read real good. Grandfather: I've noticed. Grandson: And those stupid writers couldn't even spell right. Grandfather: Really, why would you say that. Grandson: Cuz, dey messed up when they spelled Dracula. They spelled it, D r u c i l l a Grandfather: Is that right .... Grandson: yeah, I think I've figured it out. See, that's why they were warm and glowing. Grandfather: Who? Grandson: Dracula and Rosa. Didn't you write that story, Grandpa?! Grandfather: NO! a few of my friends did. Go get your mother. | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14030 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
Maybe you should monitor what your grandson is reading, Gramps. This is an adult discussion board. You should also stop thinking that because you are a notoriously bad speller, that others are too. And I am still trying to figure out what the word "moniker" has to do with this subject. This word is defined as a "nickname". Like I keep saying, I'm a stickler about certain things. In order to uplift the characters, they first have to stray before they can be shown the error of their ways, and how true love conquers all. That's the way conflict is added to the plot. But, no, you wanted to drone on and on about the "adventures" of a bunch of everyday prudes. It's all about grabbing the reader's interest. We did establish that "sex sells". | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14032 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
And just for good measure, tell that precocious little varmint to stay outta grown folks' business.  | ||
| Cynique "Cyniquian" Level Poster Username: Cynique Post Number: 14035 Registered: 01-2004 Rating: N/A |
And, oh yes, Yvette. I wasn't referring to newbies coming aboard to expand the participation in the online novel. I was talking about the ol gang re-surfacing and revitalizing a forum which has degenerated into me testifying about the paranormal, and wallowing in melancholia. Alas and alack. Good thing Troy is re-vamping things. |
